I give you my heart
in a box
that i have labled on top
and that lable reads FRAGILE

and it is my gift to you
for i love you
and should you love me
this box is for you

You may open the box
should you wish to recieve
the love i have
to give to you

I give you my love
in a box
that i have labled on top
and that lable reads FRAGILE

and it is my gift to you
for i want you
and should you want me
this box is for you

Take care while you open
this box is not to be shaken
the soul i have
i give to you

I give you my soul
in a box
that i have labled on top
and that lable reads FRAGILE

and it is my gift to you
for i need you
and should you need me
this box is for you

Be careful as you take it out
for it is my life
and this life i have
i give to you

Do not shake this box
nor drop it
nor crush it

instead speak softly to it
and hold onto it
and and tell it you love it

I have a gift for you
if you should want it
but keep the box
and if you need return it
wrap it up tight

and do not shake it
nor drop it
nor crush it
for it is my life

and i cannot bare to live
if i am shaken
or dropped
or crushed

but if you speak softly to me
and hold me
and tell me you love me

And i will give you myself
in a box
that i have labled on top
and that lable reads FRAGILE
for that is what i am

thats good, I like the structure

Do these words have a melody to them?
They seem very lyrical.

If it is a lyrical work, my comments would be a little off the mark,
but anyway, I would try paring the incidental words,
in order to focus on the key phrases.

Sort of like,

I give you my heart in a box I have labled on top reading FRAGILE

I give you my gift for I love you and you should you love me this box is for you
only

You may open the box should you wish to recieve all the love that I have to give to you

This is a sexy poem, I want to feel its seductivness, more vulnerable.

S.