She walked down the lonely path with a frown
In her frail hand she held a wilted rose
Billowing in the wind was her red gown
In her clear blue eyes nothing gleaming shows
Her heart was broken upon this new day
By a man who's mind sought anothers amrs
She found them together having their way
With harsh words and gestures she stopped their charms
Though love compelled her to say, she left him
She wandered aimlessly around the town
Til that fateful day when her life grew dim
And she took her last breath without a sound
Love and remembrence shall come of this
Hold on to the things you are bound to miss

This has much potential and potency, but it's poor in formation only.... not you the formers quailty! And I dare not critcise unless I can offer to make it shine as it should and does within, within me....may I try to repair it?

If your reply's, no....it good either way


Respect Jasper

sure go ahead have fun