softly down the slick of back
the water slid so gently
delicate with each caress
intent to kiss the boundary
cheeks turn red
lips are plush
her breath is slightly bated
complete with ease
and diving in
the puzzle fits as fated
a rushing energy breaks me free
(finally)
envelops all that's breathing
the wink of charm
the flirt of smile
this ever constant teasing
should she be coy
should she hold back
for she is just a maiden
but she cannot deny
the soul in these eyes
this heart has been so laden

our sight turns into liquid
like the fastest river racing
hands gripping earth
head swimming sky
preparing hearts by embracing
unfolding here this new
release- climatic catalyzing
built up and up and further still
a turn, a dance inviting...
implodes explodes transposed
to stars
that grace the vast dominion
excited pulsing moment lingers
wrapped up inside a companion

Love it. Fantastic imagery.

Well done. Very very well done.

that grace the vast dominion
excited pulsing moment lingers
wrapped up inside a companion

I liked it until it hit these halfway rocks here above!
These lines should implode within a duet of atomic unity, a cosmic tryst,...errrr...not dominion for companionship only!
I am sorry if you feel I'm being too critical, but it only my truth and that nothing to nor against you!


Love Jasper

Jasper's right you now. This is one of the best pieces of erotic poetry I've come across on this site, but sort out the last few lines and it'll really kick ass.

Heaving disgraces spent saturated within
excited pulsations dull sparkle, two tingles
spent twinges, melting undo movents.... unity moments
two sweetest memories?

Love Jasper

Maybe, but I don't sh*t from clay here for yours

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Heavenly disgraces, spent saturated within,
excited pulsations trickle sparkle, tingles,
desperate twinges, melting undone movents.... unity's moments,
sweetest memory: as seconds... tick tick tick...tock?

Now I like this but....Errrrrrr you know

Love Jasper