Your mangled body
Your tattered clothes
My sacred temple
To their dispose
Why did you leave
Before I said good bye
I found your bloody body
After you had died
Your blood on my hands
Your voice is in my mind
Your lifeless body
Was left for me to find
I picked up your head
And laid it upon my lap
Tears streaming down my face
As I begged for you to come back
I wipe away
My tears from your cheek
"I Love You," I whispered
And I expected you to speak
Find your way home
Now that you are free
Promise me
You'll watch over me!

This was very good. Others will disagree, I'm sure, but I think the last two lines should have differents words to end them, in rhyme rather than duplication. Not necessarily this, but something like:

Promise to be
A guardian over me

Feel free to ignore.

I look forward to seeing more of your work.

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my old sn was Katie ..so if you want to see more of my work, look for this sn....TwiztedKitty

I like the end just the way it is, but I think the line "To their dispose" is confusing. But then, clarity is a feature of prose, I suppose.

Katie, I really do love this poem.

I think I would advise you to just leave it as it is.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us! This is a very powerful poem.

Thank you all so very much....Your words are intellegence and motivation for me to carry on....Thank you all so very much....

~Katie~

This is my first post in this forum...I like that there are so many members. Thanks and Good Luck to Everyone!!

~Katie~

Yep;I like this too! Good poem.

/Tobias