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itsinhiseyes
Posted this in the wrong place yesterday. (and again this morning. Sorry Caitiff)

Imagine if you can a love that dies at birth, a love that's sabotaged, a marraige which begins disasterously. They're lined up and ready to go, but there's a distraction which focuses attention elsewhere. They've missed the starting gun. With out any warning or discussion she ups and leaves him broken hearted.

No mention of intention

On your marks
Get set
Dog barks
False start
Poison dart
Finds its mark
Deadly shark
Strips the bark
Broken heart
Torn apart
Vacant atom no quark
All is barren bleak and stark
Hark
Silent sky muzzled lark
Lights out you’re in the dark
No spirit, no spark
No comprehension
Please pay attention
No mention of intension
Explanation or remark
Hey Hey
Clever stuff.
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