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rosediamond
Are you human today?
Tell me before I kiss you good morning.
There are so many risks in a monster's embrace.
I've felt the talons on my back
Carving cloth and flesh away
Within the gentle curve false loving made.

Are you mortal at all?
Do you feel the razor you hold?
Is the blood that stains linen domesticity
Ignored in pride's morphine-laced fold?

If I died tommorow
Would you even say a prayer for me?
I wish you would . . .
I've begged upon brusied knee for God to salvage thee.

Though you strike me,
Slice me through,
Take my heart and wring from it
The tenderness I wished true,
I find that I'm addicted
To your toxic cologne and arsenic-laced kiss.

Someday I'll break the habit
Of my hopeless love of you.
Until that day, I turn my back
And close these burning eyes
And hope you think I'm sleeping
In the glare of first break light.

WON'T SOMEBODY SAVE ME??

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This is by no means from personal experience, so please do not worry about me. I can hold my own just fine. *evil smile*
Mark W Ballard
Love is such a funny thing. When everything works, it's the most incredible part of life. When it doesn't, it's every bit as incredible in the opposite extreme. You've captured the downside beautifully.

Glad to hear you didn't have to suffer it to nail it dead on in this one.. wink.gif

BTW, I really like this one. It's what poetry should be in my book. With your permission, I may copy this one off to read again sometime..
rosediamond
Thank you very much for your kind words, Mark, and feel free to copy the poem! To quote the fair Maid Marian, "Twould be twerrific!" happy.gif
Hey Hey
Great imagery here and a fine story in poetry.
Windowmaker
Yes, amazingly poingant piece of writing. What was the inspiration? This is perhaps the finest writing I have seen from you. You really captured the feelings well and made us all feel the tension, the fear, the loathing, the anagonizing. It was such a real post I was surprised by your little note at the bottom. I absorbed every word like a little sponge! Kind of a thriller of sorts that I thoroughly enjoyed after realizing it wasn't "Megan's cry for help". I simply love your writing. Refreshing, vivid, full of emotion and integrity. You have given me many a smile. Thanks for sharing.

Kevin
rosediamond
Thank you, Hey Hey, for your kind words. They are much appreciated. happy.gif

Thank you, also, Kevin. To tell the truth, I was wondering if it was my place to write such a post, since I have not experienced such hopelessness in a relationship. Nor will I. EVER. I have, however, been watching many Lifetime movies of late. Weird sort of inspiration, I know, but seeing the suffering others go through in such movies, and, unfortunately, in real life, I felt the need to try to channel the emotions they feel and put them into words. To tell the truth, I felt that this poem was somewhat sub-par . . . I don't know why. Probably because it didn't look like I "raped the thesaurus" as my brother so lovingly accuses me of. I just didn't feel that extensive vocabulary would flesh out the piece. But I'm glad that you liked it.

~Much Love To All~
Megan
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