This is a poem about stars…


Those blazing spheres so delicately hung in the midnight canopy.
So elegantly dangling far beyond our reach.
You know you want to touch one, even if you are afraid you might
get burned…

This is a poem about yearnings…


Those turbulent emotions welling up into one single melting pot within you.
Fighting a losing battle to survive it just goes without much saying.
You know you want to touch me, even if you are afraid it will all boil over…


This is a poem about smiles...


Those cute little turns of the corner of my mouth that never seem to appear.
Don’t blink or you just might miss it!
You know you’ll stick around to catch it, even if you’re afraid
it will never take shape…


This is a poem about friendship...


Those moments where you sit together on the front porch swing and neither of you say a word.
Yet, by the time you leave it’s the best conversation you’ve ever had.
You know you won’t break the silence, even if you’re afraid you’ll never hear my voice again…


This is a poem about love...


Those final hurdles that test your faith in the one you choose as your own.
Just waiting for that day when you can finally be as one.
You know you’ve got to make the leap, even if you’re afraid you will fall…




This is a poem about stars...


Those adorable little flecks that I find within your eyes.
I can see them sparkle the most in my mind.
I know that this is a risk I am strong enough to take, because I am not afraid… that deep down… this time I won’t…be…burned.

Hi Misty!

Yes, this one works especially well, because of the construction; the design is particularly effective, especially the return at the end, the arc of transit from stars to stars, particularizing from the general, from the stars in the sky to the stars in the eye: macrocosm to microcosm.

A very impressive poem, and especially because of the architectonics. As Eliot wrote, "In my end is my beginning."

The repetition of key elements is especially effective, and I enjoy the introduction and treatment of the element of risk (the great bar to human experience, to living fully, the "leap of faith") with the "even if"s. That is a very effective and memorable element of unity. Another thing I really must single out for honorable mention is the broadening of the pace at the end, the slowing through the use of ellipses, or "spacing dots," as I like to call them (...). I do that too.

You are getting better all the time, and this becomes a great favorite of mine among your so many wonderful works.

Do be encouraged.

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA

To the stars through difficulty, whether they be in the sky or in the eye.

Technically very innovative. I like very much.

Hey Hey

Misty, this is great! Very nicely, neatly put together so that it flowed well. Nicey nice!