WHAT DO YA'LL THINK WOULD BE A GOOD TITLE?



I have a white fire burning deep inside my soul
Because I want to hold you and never let you go
I want you with me for the rest of my life
but this cannot happen without strife
I do not want to hurt you in any way
I guess it's my heart that will pay
So remember when we are seperated by many miles
just give me a call and hear my smile
Hear the words I can only share with you
Even though you will only hear a few
I will tell you what my mind has to say
but many words from my heart will stay
Will stay with me so you will never truly know
What you have been to me during many of snow
I have dreamt of lovers on a grassy noll
but the mere thought takes it's toll
I swore you wouldn't be part of my life
because I am already someone's wife
but when I wake in the morning
it's your face that keeps me going
The hope that today will be the day
that I will hear you say
"I Love You"

Welcome, welcome among us, our new friend!

Hmmm... How about this?

White Fire (this jumped out at me from the text first)

or

That Today Will Be the Day (this might be a good one; it also jumped out at me)

When I first read this poem, that phrase, "white fire," is what leapt out at me, and my spider sense told me that ought to be the title. Then upon second reading, the latter phrase, "that today will be the day" made the spidey sense tingle the more.

I do think titles are best derived from text. If you want to change this man's behavior, so to speak, and hasten the day when he does say those three little words, then the latter title is better.

I think my final answer is:

THAT TODAY WILL BE THE DAY

Does the "ga" in your screen name stand for the state of Georgia? I always wonder about people's screen names...

I love your poem. It is a good poem about a very real and not uncommon dilemma... I hope so much that it works out for you...

My name is +Steven, and I am Poet in Residence hereabouts. I welcome you in the name of all, and invite you to hang out with us and be our friend.

Thank you so much for coming to join us. I think you will find a happy and an open and an accepting home here among us all.

Ubi caritas et amor, Deus ibi est.

+Pax tecum.

Hello there!
I think that Stevens first suggestion sounds really pretty! White fire!

(BTW;Welcome to Mind-brain.com)

Greetings~
Silke

Yes, my wife, Silke, is right:

White Fire

That was my first hunch, and if there's one lesson in poetry I can give you right up front it's that we poets always must obey our intuition, our first hunch.

WHITE FIRE

Thank you, Silkchen.

Respect and Solidarity to all.

I love "White Fire" as the title.
It not only captures the poem, but the essence of what love is all about.
Wonderful poem.

White fire for me too.

I come from Hey and I have a stammer!