I?ll breathe, just as silently
As your laughter
I?ll kiss your star lit eyes
Your flesh, melts with mine
You breathe, so easily
You pant and whisper
As I sigh eternally.

I?ll sing as softly as you cry
Whilst I reach in and steal your heart
And you will catch my act
And mock my failure
You have defeated me once again
My insecure longing and I
Dismantled.

At dusk I will dream
You will kiss my neck
Lightly, and the freckle on my chest
Gently message my shoulders while
Whisper in my ear
How you?ve always wanted me
How you?ve always dreamt.

Ravage my pale existence
Grasp all I have to offer
I shall push you against the wall
Bite your shoulder
Whisper ?At last?
Now you?re mine
And I awake.

My skin tingles and crawls
I can still hear your laughter
Replaced by silent sobbing
I will have you
I will kiss you a million times
And you will explore me inch by inch
Whisper how you?ve always dreamt.

misty - you know you really are very talented - i have only been here a few days - and your verse share a raw truth - its quite exquisite
I am unsure if one can give guidance here or not?
SMILE
but if thats acceptable I would eliminate the ? after the 'I'

I am very impressed with your writing my friend - the format - the depth you share is really very stunning

love titch

Your free to say what ever you want titch... Thank for your sweet words.. I also love your work.. keep it up friend... thumbs up


misty..

good work. I thought the ? after the 'I' was a copy/paste thing in which it appeared as "I'll" in whatever word processor misty used, and then when she copy and pasted it here, that the apostraphe got converted to a '?'. Is the ? after the 'I' supposed to be there?