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LocoJay
On a sun-Leaving Island
In a people talking crowd;
I hide the clouds with my hand
As my spirit cries out loud.

On a grassy scattered field
In a place known as the shell
I sit under the palms shield,
As God arrives all is well.
Silke Lance
QUOTE (LocoJay @ Jul 07, 08:04 PM)
On a grassy scattered field
In a place known as the shell
I sit under the palms shield,
As God arrives all is well

Jay!
I really like those four lines!

Thanks for posting

~Greetings
Silke
LocoJay
Thanks Silke! I wrote that on my mission's trip to hawaii (yes hawaii hehe)
It was great to see so many people come forward to make commitments of faith for Jesus Christ! How are things with you? Godbless~

in Christ,
Jameson

James 4:10
AmbientSnowflake
Very nice. But what about the people talking crowd? What are they saying?
LocoJay
To me I guess the reason I didn't put what the people were saying is that it adds to the effect of the moment I went through. People were talking in my group and laughing and what not, but it was just kind of abstract , like when your in a stadium and there are hundreds of conversations going on, but it was just still like a quiet time I had with God, wasn't really listen to them. Thanks for the reply!
Have a great , Godbless~

in Christ,
Jameson
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