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It's the little things that make it great
eating popcorn and staying up late
the squirt gun fights
and sleepless nights
Just the little things

It's the little things that make it awsome
gardens full of flowers in blossom
sleeping in
and fights you win
Just the little things

It's the little things that make it a dream
unlimited candy cake and ice cream
the lack of school
and jumping in a neighbor's pool
Just the little things

It's the little things that make it grand
like sunbathing on the sand
the newly cut grass
and a great frisbee pass
Just the little things

It's the little things that make it what it is
soda pop with unending fizz
t-shirts flip-flops and short shorts
days filled with every sport
Just the little things....that make it summer
+Steven Curtis Lance
Hi Kim!

I love your poem for two reasons:

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I love the little things of summer, and I enjoy reading about them here in your poem. I also think that's a really good title. By the way, maybe I should mention here that titles don't have to be hard to think of; the best title is usually the most obvious. This is a good title, and a good concept for a good poem.

Hmmm... let me mention some of the specifics of the form which I particularly enjoy...

I love the rhyme scheme of your poem, with each stanza containing first a couplet of longer lines and then one of shorter lines, and then I also love the repeated opening phrase and final refrain lines which begin and end each stanza; these are very good and strong unifying devices. Then, at the very end, the final statement after the pause, which lengthens the final line, brings a satisfying closure to the poem.

And then the subject matter is just so delightful! All the wonderful things, the little things of summer to which we look forward and always remember. There is a very nice atmosphere to your poem; it's open and refreshing. It's sweet without being in any way saccharine; it rings true. Let's face it, summer is a sweet subject! So it's a very positive poem, as well it should be.

Summer really puts me in a good mood. I have written a lot of happy poems about summer too.

I think this is my new favorite among your poems which I have read. I hope my comments have been helpful to you.

Do be encouraged, and do, by all means, have a wonderful summer!

Respect and Solidarity.

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