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Justme88
The lyrics of a love song
Sung just for you
With subtle jokes
And special words
But not written with you in mind

Romance of a lover’s tale
Watched just for you
With subtle looks
And special hints
But not written about you

I poem from a lovers heart
Recited just for you
With subtle love
And special means
But not written for you

Each three to do with lovers they held
Written and sung and recited for you
With subtleness only from me
And special ways to express my feelings
With thoughts of you the entire time
+Steven Curtis Lance
I like the quality of paradox which you bring to this poem, sort of like in your other poem, "Untouchable Rockstar." Very nice, and the approach/avoidance, to-care-and-not-to-care quality of the early stages of attraction and jockeying for position in a young relationship is cleverly realized.

You write well of relationships; your words ring true, and have a subtle sense of humor about them which I find refreshing.

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA
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