He's the one I always see
out of the corner of my eye
the one that makes it sparkle
and to it I will deny

I do not love him
I do not love him so
i will not let him do something to me
unless it's something i know

He's the one that makes me smile
in the corner of my mouth
the one that curves it up
instead of pulling south

I do not like him
I do not like him much
I will not cling to him
or lean on him like a crutch

He's the one that makes me giggle
from the corner of my side
the one that makes it hurt so bad
so i need to hang on for the ride

I do not think of him
I do not think of him a lot
I will not let him fill my head
or tie my heart in a knot

His music will not fill me up
I will not care about his looks
I will leave it at i met him once
and he will not be a character in my books

I wish he was,
all that i stated above
but he's not, instead
he's just a wished for love

Hey, Kim...

You meant 10 to be best, right?

I gave it a ten; I just wanted to make sure that means best.

Respect and Solidarity!

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA

thank you ..and yes ten is best...umm any thoughts on the poem itself? good or bad? I spent a little extra time on this one and am trying hard to better my poetry.

I have yet another attorney meeting just now; he just arrived, so I will get back to you later.

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA

OK, Kim, here I am again. The meeting with the attorney, the trustee for The Steven Curtis Lance Irrevocable Trust, went beautifully, and I am very happy right now. The best part of the meeting was that, right in the middle, my book arrived, all beautiful and exciting! I just can't begin to tell you what it means to me. Two copies came; I gave the trustee one, and he gave it back to me with a pen: my first autograph! I have autographed lots of choral octavos over the years, but THIS is different. Thanks be to God.

As to your poem, good or bad... well, I certainly don't find anything bad about it. I love the concept, as well as the execution of that concept: Untouchable Rockstar. I think it really works; it grabs me and I "get" it. I can relate, and I understand what you are saying. Now, I think you probably would have to hear from "experts" like the Flake of Doom to hear all sorts of nit-picky little criticisms; what do I know, I'm just the author of a 514-page book of poems. I'm not a nit-picker, sorry; I like your poem, it works for me. That's about it. As I say, I can relate to it, it speaks to my experience and to my heart.

I wish you every success, every happiness. Your poem is a ten. Enjoy being a good poet, and enjoy the progress which you are making. That's the trick, to keep growing, always. I am still growing, too.

(I have to go celebrate now.)

Respect and Solidarity!

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA

~A strong and powerful poem.
Well written.



Silke Lance