+Steven Curtis Lance
Jun 15, 2004, 02:34 AM
Transcendental Sonnet #731:
Nothing But This Kiss
A lawyer and a Social Security clerk...
I must deal with the strangest people nowadays
Because of what my Grandma called my "mental quirk"
And because of the greed of relatives always
How strange it is to be here and be in my shoes
Surely you must understand why I have the blues
Although I have the blues still I know I am cool
No one can make me do what I refuse to do
I may be slightly mad but I am no damned fool
But never could I bear this were I without you
Because of you Silke I can get through all this
Without you I would be dead a long time ago
What will happen next with me I will never know
But nothing matters Silke nothing but this kiss
*~ ( + ) ~*
+Steven Curtis Lance
Copyright MMIV Silke LLC
Meklo
Jun 15, 2004, 05:07 AM
I wasnt particularily keen on the first stanza, but the rest was great. I especially liked the ending...
I like the way you can see your emotion in your sonnets. Man you have written a lot of these havent you? Do you write one each day?
I tend to just write when I feel inspired... or if im writing a song. (maybe Silke inspires you every day... )
+Steven Curtis Lance
Jun 15, 2004, 06:34 AM
Meklo, the first stanza, and all of the sonnet, is about actual details of things happening in my life. Perhaps the specificity didn't ring any bells with you, but this sonnet, like all my others, is a journal entry specific to the situation. This is just what I do; I write about what is going on in my life each day, and there is a lot going on, especially today. As a journal entry, it is chockablock with factual detail. Only Silke knows all the details, with my three children knowing a few, my doctor a few others, my attorney, my sister Dara and a short list of people I send these sonnets to daily each recognizing various pieces of the puzzle. So I think maybe you wondered about the references, and, not knowing me, they didn't mean anything to you. But one need not know me to read my sonnets. I take my daily life and write about it. In this way, I deal with daily difficulties, daily joys, daily challenges. If I had more time right at this moment, in fact, I would tell the whole story of this sonnet, but it is still unfolding as I type these words. I have just been on the phone with my attorney, and I am about to call the trustee of this trust I have now, to deed the house in such as a way as to provide maximum benefit to my children and to preserve my Social Security benefits.
I guess writing these sonnets is a form of therapy for me. They are each pretty specific. It helps, and I hope they prove of some interest to some; I am told they do. Silke is the ultimate audience for them all; really I write them all and each for her.
And yes, Silke does indeed inspire me every day. I do write at least one sonnet a day. Some people keep journals in prose, I keep mine in poetry, in sonnetry to be precise.
Thanks for reading.
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+Steven Curtis Lance
Jun 15, 2004, 09:33 AM
Hello again, my friends.
I just made some changes to lines 6 and 7, which I think make the sonnet much stronger; I hope you like them.
I fuss endlessly with my work! I am an eccentric old formalist perfectionist!
If anybody else--like this Meklo dude (the critique board is down the hall, by the way)--wants to know any of the specificities of my sonnets, let me know. I am delighted to report that this whole thing with the lawyer is working our beautifully. Tomorrow we'll see how it goes with the Social (In)Security clerk.
Respect and Solidarity!
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