I'm just sitting here thinking about you
About what you did, we couldn't stop you
I cry every night even in my sleep
My depression has fell so very deep
Please come back to me
I can help you see
There are more things to live for
Since you've been gone my heart has tore
You were a great friend
Only if that didn't end
You gave me a hug when I found out about a death of a loved one
But now all that is done
Not many are here for me now
I'm still alive somehow
Not many were there for me then
Dead is what I should already have been
I wish I knew how bad you were feeling
When I'm by myself I hear your guitar squealing
Oh, I know you regreted it after it was done
Now you realize, You were loved by everyone

very touching manda '

Are there like moderators on this site anymore
I have a few poems/songs but hardly anyone if anyone has like replied

Hello Hurt my numbness,

As a moderator, I see my function on site as helping to keep things running smoothly, both for the benefit of the site and and for the benefit of 'average' users.
And, I must say, as a tribute to all members and guests, I have not felt the need to remove anything. I have moved items onto more sensible boards to get the optimum airing, however. I realise that my judgements are as much a reflection of my own character (if not more) as that of contributors. I do not agree with everything that is posted, but then I don't expect everybody else to agree with my words; learning comes from realising mistakes and taking suitable corrective action.

This does not include automatically commenting on the values of anyone's poetry.
This is for people who read poetry to comment upon.

I do contribute to any forum that I find interesting, including the poetry sections sometimes.
Can you think of any way to increase the feedback for writers?
I do notice that some ask for opinions and then complain when negatives are pointed out. (The writer just wants pats on the back - not personal comments). How is the reviewer to know, and what is the point of false statements anyway?
I accept that there are ways of softening critical views, but not all people have these skills or see the need to use them.

Bye for now, Bill.

when I was moderator on this site I replied to as much as I could


Hi-top

you don't need to be a moderator to reply to posts though.

Manda:
Then there exits that old cliche," Be careful what you ask for, you may get it!"
It appears you are seeking critique for HURT MY NUMBNESS, so, I shall try to oblige you.
Let's start with language.
It appears to me the topic is suicide. (I may be wrong.)
But for the sake of word play, let's look at this word.
Suicide
Genocide
Homicide
Infanticide
Do you see these possibilities?
I believe, every writer needs a great dictionary and a decent thesarurus on their desk.
These are the basic tools of the trade.
I believe, to attempt to write successfully without these vital books is attributing to the; "ruin of one's own interests."
Read and write on!

My friend hung himself

well if you were credible, you'd have my sympathies

credible?

Manda:
I figured suicide was the topic.
You have a lot of emotions to write through, use this as your place to work.
One definition I heard of poetry is; "When nothing else will suffice."

My friend hung himself
Suicide
Credible?

My friend hung himself
Societal homicide
Is the ink on his death certificate indelible?


My friend hung himself

(I think, this is your powerful line, the essence of your pain, the psalm to your friend).


Keep at it.

Work this. These are the emotions that create great poetry.
Keep working.