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daydreamer4267
Silky petals, not so silky anymore.
Brown wrinkled edges, salty sores.
Tired leaves, dropping dripping water.
Tears pool in a puddle, sky reflecting,
behind a wilted, tired rose.
+Steven Curtis Lance
I like this one!

Beautifully-detailed description, concentrated and focused, creating one clear image.

I especially like this line:

"Tired leaves, dropping dripping water."

The "dropping dripping" is, to me, the best moment of the poem.

Very nice!

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA
Silke Lance
Oh,very nice!
daydreamer4267
Thank you very much!
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