daydreamer4267
Jun 10, 2004, 01:56 AM
Silky petals, not so silky anymore.
Brown wrinkled edges, salty sores.
Tired leaves, dropping dripping water.
Tears pool in a puddle, sky reflecting,
behind a wilted, tired rose.
+Steven Curtis Lance
Jun 10, 2004, 03:14 AM
I like this one!
Beautifully-detailed description, concentrated and focused, creating one clear image.
I especially like this line:
"Tired leaves, dropping dripping water."
The "dropping dripping" is, to me, the best moment of the poem.
Very nice!
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