Boredom

my palm bears the weight of my forehead.
my eyes scan empty walls.
my mind is an olive a circling
the bottom of a martini.

emptiness sits
glass bottoms stare.
songs of nothing
swim from ear to ear.

my eyes wear dark circles
smoke drifts through my lungs
my mind is a windmill void
of a swift breeze.

I like to write about my state of mind, although i am not sure it is always effective. Never the less, I have fun.

Writing about your state of mind is one way to write poetry. Although, I don't think the outcome is as substantial as writing about other things. Sylvia Platt, and other writers of her era were confessionalist poets. They changed poetry in their time. But to confess? To show us what was on their mind? I do sucumb to poems about my own state of mind. It is a starting point for me, a launching pad, a begining to no end.

What are the songs of nothing swimming from ear to ear? Sing them. These walls, are they really empty? There must be something on them.

You're writing about the lack of thought rather than an actual thought.

Thanks for your comment:)... The lack of thought is what I was writing about. Sometimes, my thoughts are empty and I suppose I was trying to convey that feeling of nothingness. I often write about other topics, but when there is no topic to fit my current mood, the state of mind just comes out. Sometimes I just like to feel the rythm of words.

Daydreamer,

I find this particular poem almost enchanting... It makes me want to be in the state of mind you were in when you were writing this poem... just to experience...

Good writing and thank you for sharing...


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what is profound about the absence of thought, the state of thinking of nothingness-- the profoundness of that moment, that state, that instance? bring that out.
i like how you put your words together. you have talent. snowflake is good to stimulate your poem further.

Thanks for your comment as well as evryone else's. Maybe I should try and think about what is "profound" about that. I did not look at it that way. Perhaps I will rewrite and put some more thought into it. Thank you for that perspective. I found it insightful.

although.. putting in more thought does not represent the lack of thought.. but who cares... not me

it is tricky. paradoxical, maybe.
if so, you have to have the right perspective and tense: 3rd person, or 1st person past/reflective, etc.
even so, maybe that is what is or part of what is profound about it.