Hi again, thnx for your opinions they were very helpful and encouraging. I revised my poem but, I am an amateur and I don't know if I made "the profoundess of this poem ... explode." =P I would again appreciate your critiques.


Just Is


Some things... just are,
Unable to do It, It is not to be done,
Unable to stop It, It is unstoppable,
Unable to change It, It is an unchanging essence,
Unable to disobey It, forced to forever abide,
Gravity can essentially be what It is,
It can be the past,
It can be the unknown,
the undiscovered,
the unseen,
The unexplained and unexplored,
On can stop believing in It,
but It will still exist.
One can despise It, deny It, defy It,
and It will still exist.
It just is.


~M.K.

just a sidenote.
=/ everything got pushed to the left.
The uncapitalized first letter lines are supposed to be spaced more to the right, but oh well.

ahh
i think i need to change/reword "One can stop believing in it"
I still have trouble with these 2 lines. -
"Unable to do It, It is not to be done,"
"Unable to stop It, It is unstoppable,"