Dcents
May 28, 2004, 12:12 PM
this girl
she walks by
a faded smile
cringe
a fake hello
a faded smile
i love her body
she laughs
something, her eyes
never did anything
could have been perfect
something, its open
this girl
she changed me
it beats me
i didnt change her
it beats me
caitiff
May 28, 2004, 01:05 PM
hey. this poem is beautiful. it is so simle yet complex and the format is wonderful. you have an
incredible skill
salutes
AmbientSnowflake
May 28, 2004, 07:20 PM
It seems like she's an object. You should talk to her... maybe.
pashmina
May 29, 2004, 11:19 PM
tell me more...
seems there is so much of a story hereyou are not spilling us into.
you have my interest.
(i particularlly like the last stanza)
Dcents
Jun 01, 2004, 03:25 PM
ye i gues it doesant explain things well unless youve been in the situation before or something but i feel lke ill ruin it if i change it
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