Because I love, thus I trust.
Because I doubt, I know I must,
Surrender my heart to Jesus.

Because I am so afraid,
Because I'm weak, I am made,
Strong in the Love of Jesus.

Please come and into me breathe,
the life for which I am in need,
my soul pleads with most desperate cries,
expressing longing for You in sighs,

My sight is blurred with tearing,
My trust is fogged from fearing
But I can still see You nearing.

Take another day,
Take again my life,
Be in the words I say,
Be the end of my strife.

Jay,
this is the best prayer/poem ever!!!! i loved it. keep writing and thank you so much for sharing it.
sincerely, diona

Thank you so much Diona ! Have a great night. Godbless

in Christ,
Jameson/Jay

Nice poem Jay

~Greetings

Silke Lance

Although my religious, and cultural views contradict most of your poem I admire your intent.

Thank you Silke, thank you Ambient ! What kind of view do you hold , if you don't mind me asking ?

Godbless!

in Christ,
Jay

the rhyming detracts seriousness.
much work is to be done with punctuation. notice where your sentences are. help us be able to read it how you have in your mind and not tumble over the marks-- it should flow by those signs.

it is a sweet prayer that probably many can identify with- those who use the same language, who for those words signify the same or similar things. however, it would do you well, if you want to reach a deeper identity to work out some of your words/phrases that are packed with premises.

Thanks for your critique Pashmina, I will keep that in mind.
Have a great day/night. Godbless~

in Christ,
Jay