YOU
You came into my life like a bolt out of the blue
you took my breath away the first time i seen you
You looked at me and smiled,a smile that stole my heart
i knew from that time on we would never be apart
You walked into my life that day and made my world complete
you looked into my heart, my soul was yours to keep
You are my life my darling one,you have my heart my love
it is just such a pity they wanted you above
For you were taken from me from my world that which we shared
for some unknown reasons it seems you were needed there
So i sit and write this for you to let you know i care
and let you know my darling one im glad for the life we shared......
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| You are my life my darling one,you have my heart my love it is just such a pity they wanted you above |
Beauty in motion as the eye flows across the two lines
wonderfully put if I may say so
J
Rach!
This one really made me smile!
Very nice!
~Greetings
Silke Lance
This one really made me smile!
Very nice!
~Greetings
Silke Lance
I love this one... As I get to the end of the poem, it made me teary, its just so heartfelt. Thanks for sharing..
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Thank You so much for the replies 
I wonder sometimes, about the reality of idealized love. It is one of those things people always talk about, but never see. I don't think it's a vision of reality that lives in a fairy tale world. Perhaps what I hear people look for in this 'idealized love' is a point at which to lose the self and romanticize the world around them, and calling it destiny.
I wonder about destiny; I wonder why people still believe in it. Then I wonder if it's real.
There are commas, and/or periods you might add to help organize the flow. The last line stuck out.
I wonder about destiny; I wonder why people still believe in it. Then I wonder if it's real.
There are commas, and/or periods you might add to help organize the flow. The last line stuck out.
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| and let you know my darling one I'm glad for the life we shared... |
and let you know, my darling one, I'm glad for the life we shared...
If I'm talking to John, and I say his name in the sentence, I would say, "What a mess you've made, John, of the nuclear reactor." The commas around John show that I am addressing John. Otherwise I'd be saying, "What a mess you've made John of the nuclear reactor." Then I'd be making a "John of a nuclear reactor."
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