Falling
Bye- Nichola Cordato

A Black hole sufficated my mind
Im sucked Into it
Deeper and Deeper
Lowering forever
Cold silence
And no one to hear my calls
Stress pushed me into this
And I cant get out
Further and Further I go down
Hours, days, months it seems I go down
But yet I have not hit the bottom
Can not see it
I dont think ive even made a dent
Cry's of the saddnes in my mind
After A while I dont know if im falling
Or I lost my mind
This dullness
Bores me to tears
Weeping and cold
Why am I in here
Hatred
and disgust
I want away from this
Fatal hell
Im Falling

Well, Nikki, I like it, and it certainly sounds familiar to my own experience!

The only thing which comes to mind that I really should point out to you from reading it is just to watch your spelling. Any divergences from the standard in areas like that distract from your message and inhibit communication. Just give every new poem a little spelling-inspection when you finish it, make sure everything is ship-shape. As we say auf Deutsch, "Alles in Ordnung."

If you have some sort of spell-checking gizmo you can run it through, that would be easy.

I'm an old editor, and I have taught quite a bit, too, and given spelling tests without number; I've got that teacherly spelling-sniffer! Can't help it!

But you are coming along nicely. Remember there are some poets who can spell perfectly but don't say anything at all! So at least your horse is before your cart, so to speak.

I would certainly offer you every encouragement, and, as always, my unbreakable solidarity.

Remember:

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA

Lol.. well i just got my computer ( new one) and it doesnt have spell check because I have the old Word, and NOO spell check.. and its really frustrating..... lol so sorry i get the spell thing a lot but I really cant help it :S Sorry

Nikita

Well then, don't let it inhibit you; just keep on writing and posting. Spelling remains an external matter; your internal matters are all in order, and growing beautifully.

I wouldn't want to discourage you in any way. Keep at it, and I'll look forward to reading your work.

AD ASTRA PER ASPERA

Thank you steve.. and Ill try harder! And no that was not dis-couraging only incouraging to make my poems perfection and I respect that steve. Thank you

Loves Dahlin

Nikita

Nikita,

Your writing is powerful...I can feel exactly the profound sadness that yuo are writing about. I have been there so many times, I am sorry that you can write about this so well, but you do! I hope thru writing you will find some healing as well. Keep writing!

Love,
Dara

Thank you Dara Oh so much, and It does mean alot to me these posts becuase its means thats my poems is important enough to get a reply. Thank you and I really enjoy your positive responces... dara and all of you

Thank you

Loves Dahlin

Nikita

I'm... wow... Nikki great pomes. I only knew you as the girl from school. (my soon wife LOL) But hey.. your great at this... Share it with others dude.
Love. Brooke

Lol todally "dude" but yes I shureley will sweets ( please dont mind our wife thing its a joke between friend) thank you brooke and i will todally "dude"

Loves Dahlin

Nikita