Hey I'm new here in a not so new way. Well I use to post here I couldn't remeber my old name or my password... I mighted of written under "Unconcioustouch" I'm not to sure....

but anyways i'd love to get some feedback on this poem. At first read most of you will think you'll know what it's about, but its not that simple.... ok moving on here it is. (I hope it isn't completly awful)

One more sip to see whose blwon it,
Who really has a chance in this world anyways?
So just keep this in mind
and tuck it beneath piles of ash...
How many hits do you say it takes to reach failure?
Well my breathe may reek fruitlessly of wine and cigerrettes
But you're the one leaving notes on my front door