The Horror
By- Nichola Cordato

I want to escape
This worthless existance

And leave the hauntings,
The memmories and the suffering

Take me away
Away from this body

I feel my heart freeze
As I float up, the dead are smiling

Now the dreams are the disease
The disease that haunts me again

I might not be in my body,my shell
But its worse now that im on their side

I can still feel pain
The memmories still haunt me

The mysteries, the twist of fate
The restless will conquer all our fears
But no one seems to see

The horror thats coming up
The horror that ive gone threw
The horror that you will soon go threw
The horror that most have already gone threw
And the horror that I just explained to you

ManN no one reply' s on my poems

Ego Booster: good work!

Critical Comments: use a spell checker. You use "horror" annoyingly too much. Try using synonyms. Try being more descriptive. I'm sure you can do better.

Yea, well that was a just spontanious write lol

As I float up, the dead are smiling

that line is really striking and evocative.

wow... i know i say that at all your poems... but... i cant help it. Reading this is so shocking to me.... knowing you at school and you on this web site... They are two differnt people. Congrats... you can say words that i need help saying.. explaine things i need help to explaine. I apploud (if i could spell)
Love,
Brooke

THANK YOU BROOKE! that means alot coming from a person i know!

Thank you and you are amazing! I think you would be awesome for this site Brooke!!

Thankc

Loves Dahlin

Nikita