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burnout_00
jealousy and anger fuckin' with the brain
a thousand words a girl can say to make you go insane
the guys she knows the places she goes
she always rubs it in

where were you last night?
and of course i was at home
i stayed for you, it's what i do
you left me here alone

i treat you like a girlfriend
you treat me like your brother
you jump around from guy to guy
and for me there is no other

you know what you're doing
and god knows i know too
and still i'll stay at home for you
'cause hey, it's what i do...
Daisy Calica
So many feelings this poem has... one is so angry, the other almost pleading... If you read some of my poems, you will find I too, have some angry poems... I like the fact that you wrote what I'm assuming how you felt, at that time, its reality, and that reality isn't always pretty... It makes one feel and think... sad and happy... content and angry.... You're poem reflects some of those reality... I love it..

I just hope that the feelings written into words is now in the past...

Please keep up the good work and thank you for sharing..
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