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DAMN! I just can't stop thinking
About the way it used to be
When I first fell in love
The memories of you and me

"This knife"

We parted after only 8 months
The best ones of my life
An obsession that was unhealthy
I wished to be your wife

"It hurts"

I love you and
Can't live like this
Seeing you without me
It's you I'll always want to kiss

"So deep"

Until the day i die
I'll love you with all my heart
When in heaven we shall meet
NEVER again to part

"Tears stream"

The absence of my heart
You took away long ago
Hurts me to think of it
I just can't take it no mo'

"Blood drips"

I'm ready to go crazy
I want you back in my life
I kno it wont happen
So i'll have to use this knife

"An innocent soul free at last"

This sounded a lot better when i had rehearsed it in my mind, on paper its just stupid thanks for readin anyways and hope you will comment
- Heather

I actually thought it was great. Cool, experimental, refreshing, great imagery. It really was well written. Don't be your toughest critic. Save that for publishers. You have talent that you don't recognize. So, recognize it and move on with your writing. I for one would like to read more.

Your poetic friend,

Kevin

Hey Heather! GOOD poem!(Kevin is right:Very refreshing!)

Keep writing and posting!

Greetings~
Silke

Thanks guys your comments really mean a lot to me. this was the first time ive tried to write a poem like this and thanks bunches for the encouragement. Kevin, of the poems ive read of yours i think that you are a wonderful poet. ur poems are captivating as well, and Silke u are truly gifted! Your poems speek to me on a level i never thought i could reach. again thanks guys!
-Heather