Alone amist the shadows
of comrades or foes
haunting
seeping
forever
running
throughout my pores
falling
taunting
freely
wanting
never
finding
hope
it's dying
people
whining
screaming
punching
blood gushing
nausea
as bones break
hitting the floor
what the f*ck!?
twisted
mangled
sprawled across
ice cold pavement
gleaming in the moonlight
melting underneath
the uselessness
and pettyiness
busily
passing through me
ripping through my chest
barely hearing a faint heartbeat
meaningless
feelings tossed about
tears streaming
streaking
cutting
twisted smiles
to hide the frowns
food to force away the anguish
talking rips open old wounds
scabs broken
promises shattered
wasted words
wasting time
feeling lost
disorietation
spinning around
dizziness
eyes glazed over
are you stoned
or snokkered
or just high?
what the F*ck
don't you get the intensity of life????



Chrissy M/ Pierce

This poem is tense, intense, and make perfect sense.
I like the read, very strong, and aggressive, a sometime necessary stance to take in life.
A very good and thorough read.

Blessed Be!
Aiyana

a good read with lots of poetic sounding phrases. I like it.

Excellent unedited (i presume) freeform...and I don't say unedited b/c there are flaws, i say it because it just feels like raw emotion quickly expressed in type. I remember writing this way alot at a certain stage in my life. Now i contemplate my phrasiology a little more because i really try for original pieces in this day in age of repetition...then again nothing is ever exactly the same...just themes, subject matters...

mmmm
it is nice .. though i didn't understand some words...
lol that's maybe because i come from a different society ! lol


Best Regards
AnGel_of_Love