believe me when i lie
make me breakfast till i die
bury me while i'm alive
tear up all i have inside

slap me if you think i'm lazy
kick me if you think i'm crazy
bury me while i'm alive
tear up all i have inside

tell me why i'm just no good
tell me why you think i should
bury me while i'm alive
tear up all i have inside

show me how jesus can save me
prove that god's the one that made me
bury me while i'm alive
tear up all i have inside

A strong show of dispair in this one. Fear, doubt..maybe even a little bit of bitterness... good write!

Hmm... I wonder if you and LocoJay are inspiring one another ~winks~

me and my 'behind the scenes' thinking...always shows up when I least expect it..

Anyway..back to the poem! This really was good...That first line was definately an attention getter...excellent choice of words.. and so many things in life lack proof ~ I like how you posed you questions in this write...was very well done!

This would make a great rock song! Powerful, attention-grabbing lines that do not falter or offer apology. I like!
~Best Wishes~
Megan