Justme88
Jan 18, 2004, 02:37 PM
whats it like to be emersed in individuality
it means showing you're true personality
whether you are showing you're nationality
of flaunting heterosexuality
always be within functuality
but only if it's your mentality.
do you specialize in punctuality
or more along the lines of immorality
whatever it is we all need to come to a mutuality
and accept everyones originality
Charise
Jan 18, 2004, 02:45 PM
I personally love the shorter writes that have a lot of depth to them..and this is one! I like the rhyming scheme you have going one here as well, it was quick and precise.
The only thing I noticed that may work better is perhaps changing special to specialize...
Other then that.. wonderful job!
Charise
Jan 18, 2004, 02:50 PM
ahh...there ya go... reads perfectly for me now. Keep up the great work!