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Justme88
whats it like to be emersed in individuality
it means showing you're true personality

whether you are showing you're nationality
of flaunting heterosexuality

always be within functuality
but only if it's your mentality.

do you specialize in punctuality
or more along the lines of immorality

whatever it is we all need to come to a mutuality
and accept everyones originality
Charise
I personally love the shorter writes that have a lot of depth to them..and this is one! I like the rhyming scheme you have going one here as well, it was quick and precise.

The only thing I noticed that may work better is perhaps changing special to specialize...

Other then that.. wonderful job!
Charise
ahh...there ya go... reads perfectly for me now. Keep up the great work! smile.gif
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