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Justme88
The thing about you
is you're attractive
you're good-looking
you're handsome
and you're sweet

The thing about you
is your style
your mind
your sense of self
and your attitude

The thing about you
is you're perfect
you're faultless
you're ideal
and you're flawless

The thing about you
is you're selfish
you're dishonest
you're uncontrolable
and you're conceited

The thing about you
is you're grim
you're strict
you're fierce
and you're harsh

Thing about you
is you're sinful
you're sainted
you're the one
and i hate you
+Steven Curtis Lance
Hey Kim...

Welcome among us, and thanks for this good poem. I like the turning, halfway through the poem; I like the conflicted voice after the turning. I think that device is well-handled.

Keep up the good work.

Now, class, any other comments, critiques? We need more critiquing hereabouts, so let's have at it; I'll try to do more myself, too.




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Charise
I too liked how you switched it up from him being up on this perfect pedistal....to a surprising about face as you knocked him right off it... Nicely executed... the words were well placed throughout and had a nice rhythm... well done!

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