what makes you think i won't forget
your simple words and empty threats
doesn't quite work anymore
i'm older now, and out the door

should've listened when i said
i hate it here, i'd rather be dead
now you won't see me anymore
i'm not the kid i was before

out of sight, now you can't reach me
there's nothin left for you to teach me
should've listened when i said
i hate it here, i'd rather be dead

you never even tried
to make our house a happy home
i'd sit alone at night
almost always left alone

now i'm takin off
and you decide to care
why are you surprised to learn
that i don't know that you're there?

I love the repeat of:

"should've listened when i said
i hate it here, i'd rather be dead"

Not sure about:

"i'd sit alone at night
almost always left alone"

Maybe something like:

"I'd sit at night, in silence,
Almost always, on my alone"

I don't know, like I said I'm not very good at critique... I just dont think it sounds right.

Okay when reading the poem it seems like you're talking to this poem, parent by any chance?

"why are you surprised to learn
that i don't know that you're there?"

So this bit doesn't make perfect sense... what about:

"Why are you suprised to learn,
I didn't see you there?"

Anyway hope I didn't say anything wrong.

Kash x x

What's really funny is when you can't take any more nonsense and confront them with their own- THEN they think somethings unfair, 'Hey,.. that's not right' THEN they think something is wrong, but it takes them a while until they realize it was their mistake... in the end you're responsible for your own state of being but a parents (or friends, or partners) ignorance can leave anyone speechless. Then you experience an incredible surge to leave the house