Ha yea what a great nation
Taste it, the sensation
So many ways it’s divided
Why can’t we all just coincide
One nation under god, indivisible
I’d rather be invisible
Than face the expectations
Or deal with the formations
That this world has put on us
Like geese flying south

We need to be distinct
Not totally and completely interlinked
People need to grow and learn
Let their own fires burn
Try it just one time
Don’t make the rhythms rhyme
Do it for you
Not cus they want to
Be the lone goose
Fly north

no critiques?...good or bad i would like to hear

I like the style in which its written. It is easy to read but I think it's lacking a link between the two stanzas, of course the ending does that nicely but I think you should build another relationship between the two. It works great the way it's written but for that style maybe adding another stanza might work. All in all I like it!

it's good. It has a sing-song rhythm to it, sort of like rap lyrics, which was probably your intention. My personal preference would be to make the lines longer and to try to remove the focus from rhyming and add more focus to the meaning and emotions you're trying to convey.

hmmmm.... i think that a goose is probably not what you want to use when comparing to this topic... but if it works for you, then, great, it's creative and i've never heard of it before! great topic to choose, by the way, you have a good heart, keep up your great work.