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akhtar
Virile rogue wind, thee are but ailed
A spiralling foul beast, thee have risen from the dungeons of hell
Thee rage upon this world with thy anger
Whirling hither thee hath no such dither, thee has an incline to hurl
The eyes of thine look upon thy deeds with calm
In thine self thee art at one
poetsn2ition
Virile rogue wind
thee are but ailed
A spiralling foul beast
thee have risen from the dungeons of hell
Thee rage upon this world with thy anger
Whirling hither thee hath no such dither
thee has an incline to hurl
The eyes of thine look upon thy deeds with calm
In thine self thee art at one

An interesting read with the usage of a language of old, but I do believe I get the jist of this.

I broke up a few of the lines here, to show you how it can still come across with the same meaning and interpretation, but without overwhelming each line.
But, I did that here in my reply, so that if you want to take my advice you, can do so, on your own. And edit within your own post, as I just merely show an example of editing within my own post/reply.
I don't believe in going and changing someone's work within their post, but rather give that poster the opportunity to change it, after seeing it in my post or just leaving it as is, for each person writes in their own styles, and I would hate to assume anything. Therefore the example is given, here, and available for use, but without changing your work according to my definitions.
You may like your original work as you wrote it, therefore I did not change a thing within your original post.

Blessed Be!
Aiyana
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