like any other day
it'll start out the same
cloudy sky, dead leaves
the atmospehre is lame

This dome that i can't leave
my head filled with ideas i can't believe
like laying down and thanking god
for all that i receive

a stale image rots away
making room for the new dull pictures coming in today
in my room alone, thats where i stay
sounds of laughter fill my head as i watch my little sister play

one day, i swear they'll realize
that they're all being hypnotized
by super-size, big coke, big fries
new t.v. show, an old book dies

do i sit and die with all the rest?
that's all that's really left i guess
my heart and mind say do whats best
i don't know what that is

burnout, you are pretty good. Don't get too depressed on us though, ok? Life is not that bad, but keep writing, doesn't it make you feel better sometimes? Take care...

really like the 4th stanza ....talkin bout being hypnotized by media and stuff!!!
i would appriciate if you would critique mine..thanks!!

burnout, your poem is beautiful, when I read it I can sense all of the emotions you have. I think you had great wording, it has a good, solid meaning behind it, and it doesn't get too off-topic. the only thing that I would suggest changing is the line about watching your little sister play... that kind of places it out of porportion, kind of a different point of view than your earlier one. I like that rest of it because you have to look more into it in order to see the meaning in some parts. OVerall, nine out of ten. Keep it up!