You feel so alone
Surrounded by empty crowds
Alone inside, outside, below, and on top
Feel as though your heart may stop

Though if it did
At least the pain would be gone

You see nothing but gray
And you hear nothing they say

Woke up today
Feeling like you wished it were
Any other day

You flushed your soul
Down the toilet last night
You bleed yourself dry
To empty the darkness inside
You shut your eyes
Because life’s brighter that way

Your best friend’s your pen
And lover this ink
Nothing seems real anymore
And so further into your darkness you sink

© 2002 Christine Miller

You've got some wonderfully haunting images in this poem; I really love them... "Empty crowds," "alone inside, outside..." "Feel as though your heart may stop" That whole first stanza is pure gold, and really sets the scene, and then what follows does not disappoint; I love this image:

You flushed your soul
Down the toilet last night

and then:

You bleed yourself dry
To empty the darkness inside

and then the next two lines, and so on! The whole poem is really strong; I think this is your best which I have seen so far.

This is a good and strong and soundly-made poem.

I give you the Black Baron seal of approval: 8)

Post some more of your poems, please; I really do enjoy them, and they are among the very best we ever see hereabouts.

Wow.....i don't know what to say except thank you 8) and i am glad that you liked it

i really don't have too many new ones to post-i haven't been writing much at all for the last month b/c my brother's been sick, things are hectic and he's all that's on my mind-and for reasons i'm really not sure of, i don't want to write about him :-[


but when i get going again i'll be sure to post more-i might have a few hanging aroud lol-i'll look

I hope your brother will get all well and that everything will be good for him, and for you, and I hope you will find some more poems to share with us.

I know what you mean about not feeling like writing about him; I can't really write about certain things in my life either.

Solidarity.

Stay cool. 8)