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akhtar

Jun 04, 2003, 08:45 AM

lovers in the wind
walking hand in hand

memmers

Jun 05, 2003, 05:15 AM

Lovers in the wind
walking hand in hand
Lovers kissing wildly
In the shell infested sand

akhtar

Jun 05, 2003, 09:26 AM

Lovers in the wind
walking hand in hand
Lovers kissing wildly
In the shell infested sand
lovers spiralling from within
whispering sweet nothings

Lindsey

Jun 06, 2003, 03:12 AM

Within their souls their hearts do sway
But never shall their love go away

akhtar

Jun 06, 2003, 05:44 AM

deep feelings induce impending healing
power players, passion slayers

rhymer

Jun 10, 2003, 09:57 AM

shall we, shan't we
yessers and nayers.

akhtar

Jun 10, 2003, 07:41 PM

Lovers in the wind
walking hand in hand
Lovers kissing wildly
In the shell infested sand
lovers spiralling from within
whispering sweet nothings
Within their souls their hearts do sway
But never shall their love go away
deep feelings induce impending healing
power players, passion slayers
shall we, shan't we
yessers and nayers.

akhtar

Jun 10, 2003, 07:41 PM

is it finished?

+Steven Curtis Lance

Jun 10, 2003, 11:49 PM

As it stands now, it is twelve lines; the addition of a couplet would make it a sonnet! Would anyone like to round things off with an heroic couplet? I will see if I can come up with one, but all couplets--all comers--are welcome.

(I daresay I think we're doing rather well with this forum! Good show and carry on, mates!)

+Steven Curtis Lance

Jun 10, 2003, 11:57 PM

Here's but one possible resolution, one possible couplet; all members are encouraged to come up with their own couplets as desired:

O my sweet lover joined with me here in the sand
Come to me darling come completely heart and hand

Mmmmm....

Well, that's mine anyway...

akhtar

Jun 11, 2003, 04:09 AM

Lovers in the wind
walking hand in hand
Lovers kissing wildly
In the shell infested sand
lovers spiralling from within
whispering sweet nothings
Within their souls their hearts do sway
But never shall their love go away
deep feelings induce impending healing
power players, passion slayers
shall we, shan't we
yessers and nayers.
O my sweet lover joined with me here in the sand
Come to me darling come completely heart and hand

akhtar

Jun 11, 2003, 04:10 AM

well friends, i think this one is very nice.
its finished and if you want we could post it on the poetry board,
i will let the moderators decide the fate of this.