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TheLonelyOne
You had me
You loved me
I loved you
You had it all
But you want more
And I'm alone
With nothing else to give
You pulled me in

You told me my faults
I loved every imperfection others saw
Makeing everything you were
Perfect to me
And yet I wasnt good enough

To much of this
Or not enough of that
And I hurt
But thats life
I still adore you
And want you in my life
You are the one
That makes me stand up
The one that makes me want to breathe
The one that holds me
And yes darling I'm going to get upset
Because I let myself get so close
So fast
Yes I'll be upset
When I don't do the right things for you
But no that doesn't mean
That I don't love you
That I don't want you
Or that I want away from you

I try hard although you can't see it
I cry harder although I run before you can see my tears fall

And yes I know that its hard to make sence out of any of this
Just know I love you
And just because I'm upset with myself
Doesn't mean I don't still love you
Because I do
With all my heart
roachman1215
WOW!
Is this the same Kaysie whose poems I read 4 yrs ago?
You've become so much better at expressing tou feelings and making the reader fell them, too.
I understand what you're going thru and how much love can hurt.
Be strong, Kaysie....you'll come though eveything ok.

James
Ninjah
That was very good.
I feel a reader could be strongly moved by that and it's a poem that I actually finished reading.
NIce job. =D
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