Tell Me

Tell me when
The sun breaks through
And morning mists
Fade with dreams
Tell me when
You wake

Tell me where
The memories hide
And smiles compel
That shadows pale
Tell me where
To find

Tell me why
These times protract
And movements blur
For all our lives
Tell me why
It should

©2006 Hey Hey

I think somehow that this might be your best.

Congratulations, fellow poet!

Love,

+Stevie

thank you my friend. tell me, do you think the last line ought to be "They should", referring to the plurality of some of the preceding lines?

Perhaps. Yet I love the somehow defiant sound of

Tell me why
It should

Your choice; it is fine as it is, if you like it that way. In fact, I think those last two lines in their present form are what affected me so powerfully when I first read the poem. There is something daring in it the way it is; I take the "it" to be the "all."

Respect and solidarity,

+Stevie

DEAR HEY HEY
THEY SHOULD WILL BE MORE APT
WITH GREETS
SUPANI