Darkness
Slowly grasps my heart.
Every beat
Becomes a yearning for relief.

I want to cry
But I cannot...
I will not....
Because I cannot forget....
And I do not regret
The violence that exploded from my hands
And bled all over you.

I thought I had moved on
I believed that I had forgiven....
Your drunken laments
That pierced my life
And the abusive pain
That shattered my soul.

Curses
Race through my veins
Hatred bleeds from my eyes.
All I can do is stare at you...
Fists clenched in violence....
And the only words that come to mind...
Good-bye...
Good-bye...
Good-bye.

James M. Guzman

Oh James...
What happend?
Why are you so sad?

i am worried about you.....

Very... um... emotive. It has some strong imagery there, but I do feel that the story needs to be built up a little bit more. It doesn't really seem to have a message, and it just feels a little out of touch with anything. Some good lines in there that catch the attention, but overall, I do think that it needs some more plot.

hey meklo, dear chap/chapess

we don't tend to criticize on this form. that's more for the Poetry Critique forum. here we tend to just, well, accept. free love and all .......

nice to see you here though.

hey

hey roach

I want to cry
But I cannot...
I will not...

...............

And the only words that come to mind...
Good-bye...
Good-bye...
Good-bye.

these words got to me, friend, so strong and very heavy feelings. take care.