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I was born into Flesh,
Did i exist before time?
Did he knew what was best for my soul?
I hope that i do what i came here for and not leave
with nothing, i can see death watching me near
I know i can go anytime soon
I do not fear
Isnt every being final destiny
Death
Neural
I can relate to this
Meklo
Good subject. I'd perhaps suggest changing the final line to : Isn't the final destiny of every being death?
It just seems to flow better that way imo. Overall good stuff. biggrin.gif
Onfire
QUOTE(Meklo @ May 17, 04:19 AM) *

Good subject. I'd perhaps suggest changing the final line to : Isn't the final destiny of every being death?
It just seems to flow better that way imo. Overall good stuff. biggrin.gif



Yeah flows more like that but that how i came up with it
as long as you get it, thats my point
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