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burnout_00
Do you keep trying?
Really, how can you?
On the last day of school...
Please forget me when i'm gone...

On the last day of school
Under the bleachers...
Teachers had no hope for me

On the last day of school...
Find me under the bleachers

So what if i'm a user?
Can't i be a loser?
How can i do better?
On fire, the flaming attendance letter
On fire, the hopes of doing something
Losers drop out of school, and they're all under the bleachers....
knowmad
losers only think theyre a loser cuz of societal standards which are, of course, bullshit

dont be a loser
dont be a winner
dont be anything

wakinyan.mani
QUOTE (knowmad @ May 17, 04:03 PM)
losers only think theyre a loser cuz of societal standards which are, of course, bullshit

dont be a loser
dont be a winner
dont be anything

society may have bullS**T standards
but when you are a youth in school
the pressure can be enormous


I don't think he is trying to "be" anything
just stating something
and I personally think it is well said
"burnout_00" - keep up the good work

knowmad
wellllllllllllll excuse the sh*t out of me wakinyawn
GUEST
QUOTE (knowmad @ Jun 16, 06:02 PM)
wellllllllllllll excuse the sh*t out of me wakinyawn

You are excused I am sure!

The ones who are most angry at what is
are usually the cause
or the enabler

is your anger because one of these?
you seem awful touchy about this subject...
;-)

wakinyan seems to be defending perhaps a kindred spirit?
burnout_00 wrote a little poem about what he thinks
and wakinyan seems to be defending that right
and your anger seems strange
at such a small group of words

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