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+Franziska+
The White Dragon

Come out your dreams in darkness brewed
Come out with me and be renewed
Come out my cave and open eyes
Let us fly through emeral skies

Through the stars of morn
Glistening, shooting in the sea below
Worlds unfolding as we sail
Before our arms, behind my tail

A thousand tales of fantasy
A thousand journies, destinies
Await us every day

Let's always soar
Let's fly away
+Steven Curtis Lance
I really like this!

I love the details, like this line:

Before our arms, behind my tail

(That's a detail with a tail!)

It's vivid, and fresh. A dragon of a different color.

I agree with you, Franziska, and I say too, along with you:

Let's always soar
Let's fly away

Love,

+Stevie
Daisy Calica
Hmmm... I couldn't agree more Steven... however, I find that I feel more enchanted by

...

Come out your dreams in darkness brewed
Come out with me and be renewed
Come out my cave and open eyes
Let us fly through emeral skies
....

Makes me feel like I'm about to wake up to find something marvellous and brilliant...

D
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