Nikacordato
Apr 22, 2005, 02:25 PM
Roses are razors
Violets are tears
Ashes to ashes
As I end my fears
Roses are razors
Violets are pain
I'm running in circles
And I'm going insane
Roses are razors
Violets are screams
I am now missing
In my dark dreams
Roses are razors
Violets are cries
I am blinded in my
Fatal demise
Roses are razors
Violets are blood
I'm spinning I'm running
In my broken hearts flood
Roses are razors
Violets are death
The razor is dropped and
I take my last breath
©2005 Nika Cordato
Hey Hey
Apr 22, 2005, 02:58 PM
You're back and with a tremendous poem. I've missed your unique and stimulating style. This is great. I've been working really hard all day today developing a molecular genetics module, and my head was aching. Your presence and poem have made a happy day-end for me. Thanks Nika.
+Steven Curtis Lance
Apr 22, 2005, 03:05 PM
It's good to see you here again, Nika! I've missed you.
I love the twisting of the familiar "roses are red" rhyme to which you refer, and I am especially fascinated by the progression over the six stanzas of the "violets" line: tears, pain, screams, cries, blood, death. I like how you do that, and it's a strong structural element which holds the poem together and moves it forward--shall I say downward?--to its inevitable conclusion.
The poem works for me on several levels; I can certainly relate to the depression and suicidal impulse of it, but also I appreciate the structural cohesion of the piece.
It's good stuff: it's Nika, in all her dark and shining midnight glory.
I send you love, Nika, along with my respect and solidarity as a fellow poet. You're a nightblooming flower, and you bloom beautifully.
Love,
+Stevie
Ubi caritas et amor, Deus ibi est.
Unknown
Apr 22, 2005, 03:07 PM
Roses are razors
violets are caesars
sweet memories are treasures
poems are leaders
with greets
supani
Nikacordato
Apr 24, 2005, 07:48 PM
Thank you so much everyone for reading and replying it means a lot.
Hey Hey:
I am glad i made your day with my poem and i hope everything works out for you... i missed your poetry and its unique way of presenting and developing itself.. i am back... and i am glad
Steven:
I misssedd yoouuu. And Thank you... I am very dark in my poetic ways and I though I lost my touch for the dark side but right when you think its gone a little bit still comes out. I dont think I am as good as I use to be but I am Trying... I am glad im back with my family
Unknown:
Nice little rhyme HAHA