i just put a gist of myproposed shortstory

faded [jeans] genes
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pl advice if i can expand.

mr. rao an industrialist was recently conferred by govt of india with a padmasree award on its republicdat[jan 26] .he thanks all for extending their warm congrats .
he arranges a thanks giving function luxuriously in a hall specially spruced up for this occasion.
in the mean while unusually he got an idea to honour who stood like stepping
stones for his hard earned ascent.
surprisingly all the three members whom he wanted to honour belong
to the same family.

one mr surya as a heir to his deceased father[ who was a post man]
the other mr sarma of an erstwhile earstwhile foundry owner
mr syam a retired bank manager

father of surya could not deliver an appointment order from govt dept
because mr rao was away seeking jobs elsewhere. to make it as a surprise gift
the postman didn't deliver the letter to any of his famly members. thus he lost an opportunity to serve the govt life long with assured income. thus he was then forced to seek a private job as he just crossed the req age thereafter.

mr sarma also a son of the postmaster and brother of surya was earlier running a foundry. he was shining high in the town. he refused to stand as surety when approached by rao for seeking a loan sponsored by govt bought up to encourage
un employed skilled youth. thus forcing him to seek a jod with private units.


mr syam as a bank manager and father in law of sarma refused to sanction a loan to mr rao insisting on collateral security thus forcing him to move out to stand on his own legs
the three did not know of the honour till it was announced just before the even.
all the three once appeared to rao as enemies having blocked all the opportunities as they came on their own.
they actually ignited a fire in him making his failure at the three as stepping stones for future sucess
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can i proceed expanding it to make it more attractive. please respond.
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