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 Oct 28, 2004, 08:44 PM
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Furious guilt In worthless sobbing Racing rage Defeated chance Already scarred by Internal damage Surprising thought To remain still Out to disappear Vacate from forgery Closing all functions Stripping the costume <--- Hmm, the title to this poem sounds familiar. Perhaps its use was already originated? Sorry. |
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Oct 28, 2004, 11:14 PM
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I had trouble interpreting the third verse in the context of the first two - my problem I'm sure. But those first two were brilliant. Perhaps you could help me out with the third verse.
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Oct 29, 2004, 10:11 AM
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Awakening Group: Basic Member Posts: 130 Joined: Sep 04, 2004 From: Texas Member No.: 3413 |
Sorry about that...sometimes I get caught up in my writing. But the third verse just means that I want to disappear and stop pretending to be happy. I have to die to live. Hope it helps. I confuse myself.
 But thank you so much for taking the time to read and reply to my poem. Not many people do that these days. I would try to reply to more of your poems, but I've been so busy lately. |
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Oct 29, 2004, 10:18 AM
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Helps a lot - thank you. But I hope that you ARE happy!
Busy - I use that excuse myself (just kidding). I just like it that you submit your own poetry. It is very nice. |
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Oct 29, 2004, 09:12 PM
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Nice one, that girl!
Do be happy! ~Much Love~ Megan |
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