 Worse-haiku, By The Rick Revenger |
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| Hey Hey |
 Sep 04, 2004, 10:22 AM
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Quadruple bypass:
Detour around constriction Aim straight 4 the heart |
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Sep 04, 2004, 10:37 AM
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this is excellent. I love it.
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| Hey Hey |
Sep 04, 2004, 10:51 AM
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Thanks, but only temporary elation until Rick comes online!
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| Rick |
Sep 04, 2004, 12:06 PM
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Magnificent, but a little too medical for my taste.
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| Hey Hey |
Sep 04, 2004, 01:53 PM
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Perfection is influenced by the cataract of the beholder
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Sep 04, 2004, 02:36 PM
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Now that I have praised your mastery of the poetic form haiku, maybe you could take a look at my short story and tell me what you think.
Anonymust told me that Shawn has blocked her IP so that she can't even view poetry here anymore. I think she has been harmed enough. |
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| Hey Hey |
Sep 04, 2004, 03:21 PM
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Will look at short story.
Problem for me is that naughtymust looking means seeing means thinking means communicating (with a collaborator) means getting naughty stuff back on board. I've been sensitised and need a while longer on strontium chloride before I would give my vote. But eventually...... |
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| Hey Hey |
Sep 04, 2004, 03:45 PM
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Short story comments done.
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Sep 05, 2004, 09:53 AM
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Supreme God Group: Basic Member Posts: 5916 Joined: Jul 23, 2004 From: Sunny Southern California Member No.: 3068 |
Thanks, I appreciate the close reading and feedback.
Regarding the banning of Anonymust, I don't think she would come back now if she were invited. I, for one, enjoyed and learned from her poems. It seems to me this place is less interesting without her. |
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| Trip like I do |
Sep 05, 2004, 11:49 AM
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Anonymust was banned after-all? I thought everything was sorted out and everybody was getting along again. That's too bad beacuase I do agree with Rick in that she did instigate quite colourful commentary on otherwise lame topics. Oh well, c'est la vie.
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| Hey Hey |
Sep 11, 2004, 07:34 PM
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Can't be all lame if you're still around?
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