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| Rick |
 Aug 07, 2004, 12:14 PM
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Neurotransmitter:
Molecular consciousness In synapse abyss |
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| +Steven Curtis Lance |
Aug 07, 2004, 12:30 PM
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 Supreme God Group: Poet in Residence Posts: 8551 Joined: Jan 22, 2003 From: Perris, CA USA Member No.: 449 |
I love it, Rick!
Thank you for creating and sharing this neural haiku with us. You could write a whole series of these, you know. I would certainly be interested in them, and I would learn from them. I am also in "Sunny Southern California," as I see you are from your post signature. In fact, I am just about to go outside and take a walk in this nice weather. But, of course, I will take pencil and paper, and probably come home with a sonnet. Thanks again for sharing. AD ASTRA PER ASPERA |
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| Rick |
Aug 07, 2004, 01:21 PM
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Supreme God Group: Basic Member Posts: 5916 Joined: Jul 23, 2004 From: Sunny Southern California Member No.: 3068 |
Thanks, I may do another. It's nice to know a poet friend is nearby.
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| anonymust |
Aug 07, 2004, 04:06 PM
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Rick- your mind is like a drop of water and the water is completely unfamiliar to me.
I like it. I like you. |
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| anonymust |
Aug 07, 2004, 10:11 PM
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is your picture a dhrama wheel Rick?
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| misty_tears |
Aug 08, 2004, 01:43 AM
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gracefully..utter perfection.
misty |
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| Rick |
Aug 08, 2004, 12:02 PM
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Thanks, misty and anonymust. The picture was intended to be a somewhat radiant fractalized mandala, but I think it lost something when I shrank it to 60 x 60 pixels.
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| Hey Hey |
Aug 08, 2004, 04:51 PM
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This is great. What a good idea. Can I try one?
Thought: Escape from a synapse Hey Hey |
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| Rick |
Aug 09, 2004, 06:46 AM
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Supreme God Group: Basic Member Posts: 5916 Joined: Jul 23, 2004 From: Sunny Southern California Member No.: 3068 |
The rules for haiku in Japanese are very strict, but are more liberal in English. Generally, haiku are (Japanese nouns are both singular and plural) 17 syllables; 5, 7, and 5 on separate lines, with a break in thought (colon or em-dash) after either the first or second line. You have captured the spirit.
Bonsai Haiku Rain drench root and bud Sun warm pot, bark, and branches: Life and love on bench |
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